I recently guest-taught in an online travel writing course. One student, whose story was the most problematic, asked if she could send me a reworked version to my personal e-mail.

It arrived last week, and still needed a lot of work. The lead was wordy and uninspired and some of the sentences were confusing, though not as much as the time structure. The story began in present tense, changed to past, then went back to present, then back to past, then back to present before finally ending up in past.

I sent the writer my critique, adding that I hoped she didn't think it too harsh. She responded very positively, thanking me and saying that my comments were helpful and not at all hurtful because, in the meantime, she had sent the story to a magazine where it had been accepted.

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